Talk:Arash/@comment-217.155.41.79-20160924111920

I'm not sure about some of those translations for his NP chant.

It's broadly right, or at least within the bounds of creative translation, but there's a couple of things seem to indicate misunderstanding of the Japanese. For example,  我が成しうることをご照覧あれ is something to the effect of "look upon all that I can do/make happen", not "all that I can see". The translator doesn't really seem to understand 成しうる (it pops up again later and is flatly ignored), and as in the next line it's Arash's god that's doing the looking, at him. I'd tentatively offer "Look down upon my heart, my soul and all the paths that lie before me".

月と星を創りしもの is "creator of the moon and stars", not "servants of the moon and stars". Presumably the same deity that's being referenced throughout.

I'm not convinced by "crushed upon this place" - while it does kind of happen to work, in the sense that it's an appropriately grandiose turn of phrase to finish with, I have a feeling it's only in there because the translator saw 即座に translated as "on the spot" and thought it meant literally "at this physical location" rather than "immediately". That seems to inform the choice of "crushed", as well - "broken" or "shattered" might be a better choice of words.